Would you rather be born again as...
a) a bird;
b) a tortoise;
c) a fish; or
d) a lion?
Make sure that you give at least three reasons in a paragraph and use capital letters and full stops!
Then, write a poem about your animal using examples of personification and onomatopoeia.
I can't wait to read your poems!
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DeleteOut of all of the options you gave us,I have chosen to come back alive as a lion. I have chosen the lion because they know how to defend themselves. They also have nine lives like a cat because they are a type of cat. Lions live in Africa and in their own big space so I think that is quite cool. Lions are quite good at catching their prey so I can get lots to eat.
ReplyDeleteLions have nine lives? I didn't know that. We'll need to see if that's true or not. If it is, thanks for the information! :D
DeleteIt's not actually true because cats are actually very agile and quick so that's why people think that they have nine lives because they get themselves out of trouble. It's actually a metaphor!
DeleteWhat a great example of a metaphor! Excellent analysis Dawid!
DeleteI would like to be a lion cause they can protect thire selfs and cause they could be king of the jungle. AlSo I like lion king.
ReplyDeleteMy lion Poem called:
ReplyDeleteRage
When I am at I home I feel I want to shout and let everything out!
But when I get my dinner I don't feel like a winner because of this feeling inside.
So I run as fast as I can and ROAR!
Everything runs away and get really scared just because I am short tempered,
and just because I because I was in a rage!
My poem was all about a lion who felt he needed to ROAR. He felt he was in a little bit of a rage! Lions are a little bit short tempered so that's what I have based this on.
star ...very funny. star good you based on a real lion's life. wish I think you should include more onamatta pia and alletrian
DeleteStar: You have used the personification technique well!
DeleteStar: You have used good rhymes.
Wish: You could use more onomatopoeia in your poem.
We really enjoyed reading your poem Diya!
Thank you half of 5ac
Deletenice!!! work :D
Deletestar: You have put in a variety of words.
Deletestar: Really good use of punctuation.
wish; You have done lots of things but it needs more of a different types of Onomatopoeia in the poem!
@Miss Croash, I would rather like to be a lion because:
ReplyDelete*They are the king of the jungle
*Animals are very scared of them
*They have a beautiful,brown,soft mains
*They are very vicious!
very good reasons pavan. if I was choosing the lion I would have said the very same thing.
DeleteI would rather be born again as a lion.
ReplyDeleteThe lion is a very powerful animal. A lion has glossy fur. A lion also has
a glossy mane!
My poem about the lion is...
In the deep depths of the jungle,
I heard a murmur and a mumble,
Then suddenly a roar.
I thought it was a lion,
Then I listened again.
My tummy mumbled like an old women,
The thunder roared like an old man,
And my heart banged like an old tin can.
star. You are describing how you feel.
Deletestar. You have really done a lot.
star. maybe next you should use more ryming
Star: Wonderful rhyming!
DeleteStar: Good alliteration!
Wish: Use different poetic techniques!
i want to be a bird
ReplyDeleteI would like to be a bird because if i was a bird i could fly and look at the clouds and i would have beauty-full wings
i would be able to go really high and escape from any animal well most animals that try to eat me
if i was a bird i could fly it would be hard for me to die. when i cry in the sky i lie on a cloud and it would't be loud. even if there is a cround i will fly around it will be hard for me to run because i use my wings to have fun. Even no i would look nice i would not taste as good a rice but i will look better then mice and hotter then spice.
ReplyDeleteStar: I think you have used good rhymes.
DeleteStar: I like the way you used wings in the poem.
Wish: You could use more capital letters!
I would be a lion because of their thick glossy fur. Here's my poem it's called ROAR enjoy. When I get angry I push and hit and ROAR because i'm the king of the jungle don't bother me or i'll ROARand kill because i'm the killer ROAR ROAR ROAR.
ReplyDeleteI would like to be a lion because they have a long,soft mane,they can live for quite a long time, and they are also known as the king of the animal kingdom.
ReplyDeleteThis is my poem called ' Lions'.
I think lions are really nice
And sometimes they smell of spice
Even though they are quite fast
Against a cheetah they would never last
If they get injured they will not stop
Otherwise they might just drop
When lions run BANG!
Their prey go CLANG!
Across the hills and deserts
Where there are pheasants
And that is why I adore lions which
Are incredible and not like a witch!
I really hope you enjoyed my poem which I think is quite nice which will always include spice!!!!! Not literally though! I was just trying to rhyme!!
Star 1: Very good use of rhyming and comparing against other animals.
DeleteStar 2: Completed learning intention: Used personification and onomatopoeia.
Wish: More poetic techniques and forms.
I would like to be a fish, because I love to swim it is so FUN!
ReplyDeleteMy poem is called "A fish I wish to be".
ReplyDeleteOh how I wish to be a fish,
So I can swim around the sea , up and and all around,
So no one can see me having so much fun,
Oh how I wish to be a fish and one day soon I'll be!
It's very hard to choose! Out of all the options I'm going for my birth constellation, Leo the lion. I have similarities to a lion. Such as me being be very loud sometimes when I get overexcited (Don't tell anyone!), which is similar to a lion ROARING! As they say, I could be King of the jungle and hunt my prey down with my super speed and razor sharp, 9-inch long canines. Lions eat lots of meat to survive and thrive, just like me eating the ham I had for dinner. SCRUMPTIOUS! Most of my diet contains of Protein foods. I could also protect myself against danger, with my thick mane, nobody can bite my neck like a vampire! I also like the heat of Africa, just like summer my favourite season. That would be the best location. Here's the lion alphabet poem, similar to my school "bad feelings" poem. Enjoy!
ReplyDeleteA is for ANGRY,
B is for BLOODY,
C is for CROSS,
D is for DANGER,
E is for ENTHUSIASTIC,
F is for FIGHTING,
G is for GORY,
H is for HATRED,
I is for INCREDIBLE,
J is for JUNGLE,
K is for KING,
L is for LUCKY,
M is for MANE,
N is for NAUGHTY,
O is for OLD,
P is for PREY,
Q is for QUADRUPLE,
R is for RAMPAGE,
S is for stealthy, shhhhh,
T is for TERRIBLE,
U is for UNITED,
V is for VIGOROUS,
W is for wwwwaaaacccckkkkyyyy,
X is for X lions (the adjective meaning it being one more than nine, in this case one more than nine lions)
Y is for yan king something,
and finally, Z is for a Zig-Zag path through the life of a lion.
Yves your work stands out because nobody else before you has done an alphabetical poem
Deleteyou're right Josh. I love the alphabetical order. EXTAROARDINARY
Delete*you have used good ONOPATIPEIA
Delete*you have made it a very good lion
! more personification
Apart from that completely amazing!
I really like the ABC thing!
DeleteThanks everyone! I just thought of it while I was writing really.
DeleteAwesome absolutely awesome you have used lots of onamatopia
DeleteI would come back to life as a lion.Because there is a song called roar by katty perry
ReplyDeleteand they are a big cat and my faveroite animal is a cat.
Bubble,bubble,roar,roar, walking up and down the stairs. Plodd,plodd,tweet,tweet everythings so sweet,sweet. Birds in the sky, lions in the desert. As fish in the sea and turtles on the tides .these four choices I do see all of these are for me
ReplyDeleteYour song is really good
Delete*I really like the rhyme
*I like the style in a rap
! maybe more punctuation
birds fly and tweet like mad and that then that just makes them glad. lions roar in despair even though the two wouldn't make a very good pair. turtles plod with all their weight while fish just sit there as another's bait. I hope you all give me a wish and a star and get me half a million bars. But over all my favourites the bird, with its soft pretty, lovely hair and its beautiful yellow beak. As it flies through the sky without a single peak. A they make there way to they're destination. And make there nests with beautiful, lovely presentation. Then when the mother birds lay they're eggs a new born egg will come to life and cracks through the egg after a long tough fight and when its to go away they tweet and twerp with plenty more happy days.
ReplyDeleteAwesome poem! Joshua you have used lots of alliteration good job.
DeleteI wrote my second and improved poem about all the animals telling the reader about my favourite and three reasons why all included in a simple poem.
ReplyDeleteA stands for animal
ReplyDeleteB stands for beauty
C stands for cool
D stands for delecote
My poem is called Swish
ReplyDeleteSwish, Swish I'm a fish
Im a fish in the sea.
I swish in the sea
I swirl around the sea weed.
I think I would like to be a fish because it has is small. I would be very clever so fishermen wouldn't catch me
I could use more alliteration and others than onomatopea
DeleteI would be a person again so I can help the world theres a poem saying that you can help the world. the world can be better and youll be the couse
ReplyDeleteI would like to be a lion as I can protect myself against any other animals.
ReplyDeleteI would love to be a lion because their amazing , their fur is so beautiful and its a golden yellow colour and the their fur is so soft.
ReplyDeleteI would be a lion because I want to hunt for food and be fierce!
ReplyDeleteLions are scary,
and also very hairy,
They hunt for prey,
for almost all day,
Lions are cool,
no one can make them a fool,
They are the best,
they can beat the rest!
I think Lions are the best wild animals there can be.
I would like to be a bird and this are my reasons why:
ReplyDelete*I would like to fly.
*I would be very fast.
*I wold be able to catch prey in the sky.
This is my poem:
Eagles
Eagles fly,
In the sky,
Swooping down,
At a clown,
They have claws,
But no jaws,
But a beak that is hooked,
And lunch already booked.
I am a fish I swim under water I see coral reefs and clown fish in side they always make me laugh and every day I go far away some days my friends get captured or eat that's a life of a fish F I S H spells.... FISH!
ReplyDeleteI really liked you poem because you have used alliteration wish.you could of used onamatopia
DeleteI would be born as a lion because...
ReplyDelete1. a lion is very powerful.
2. a lion is very strong.
3. a lion is a very fury and it is a carnivore.
Stamford the lion he is powerful and strong. He never leaves his prey and instead he hunts him down the prey always buried knocked him down. ROAR! ROAR! Says the lion and licks his prey buried in the ground. Then he sees another hunter which lies and cries of course it is a deer. The lion roars and growls and says sorry but I have to hunt you down. ROAR!
I would like to be a bird, as a bird is really elegant and graceful. Another reason that I want to be a bird is because God has given birds the amazing power to fly so they are blessed by God to be able to wander all around the world.
ReplyDeleteMy poem is:
I am a bird
What a graceful bird I am,
As I fly, I see a lamb,
I see a child playing Simon Sam,
As they are eating jam and ham.
Soaring through the skies above;
I see an elegant little dove,
My friends give me a little shove,
"That is what I never love."
"NONSENSE!!!!"
I cried in uttermost shock,
Do I have to lock them up,
Inside a ship waiting at the dock.
Or push them BANG off high building block!
That is why my friends do not dare
Even to interfere,
They know I'll pull out their hair
That will leave them ugly and terribly bare.
Well done sayon you have used onamatopia and alliteration
DeleteI would like to be born again as a lion as they know how to protect themselves against predators and the can hunt any other animal down.
ReplyDeleteThis is my poem:
Name:I am a lion
I am a lion as strong as can be,
I am a lion as far as I can see,
I am a lion as I hunt and eat.
I am a lion as I can kill a bee,
I am a lion as strong as can be!
I would love to be a Golden Eagel because I would be able to fly away when something tried to get me.
ReplyDeleteMy poem is called Golden Eagel:
I'm a Golden Eagel,
when I go to the beach I see Seagulls.
I fly high,
in the sky.
When I catch my prey,
it makes my day.
My teeth are sharp,
I don't like darts
My wings are golden like the sun,
I hate gum.
I am a Golden Eagel I fly so high,
so one day you might see me in the sky.
Hi, im not in your class I hope you do not mind. I find this interesting. I would like to be a lion because I can catch my prey easily. I would be at the top of the food chain. Did you know only baby or sick and old lion occasionally get eaten. I am in 5JM.:)
ReplyDeleteThanks Dillara for posting on my class blog
DeleteCheers