Your homework is to convince this dragon to give up eating meat completely! You will need to use your best persuasive skills to convince the dragon of your argument.
You must include powerful verbs (imperatives) and write in the present tense.
You should include logical connectives and exaggeration.
You could appeal to the dragon's feelings by using emotive language.
This homework can be headed in on paper if preferred and is due in on Friday 10th January.
Remember to look at the work of others and give stars and wishes!
Dear Mr. Dragon
ReplyDeleteI would like you to stop harming animals and humans for meat.
So as an offer we advise eating vegetables and fruits such as: Tomatoes,Apples,Bananas,Chicken nuggets and so on . If you do this you will be more healthy and more fit but at the same time it wont hurt any one.
Also on the other hand if you eat fruits and vegetables you will be helping animals and humans to survive on the planet.
My final argument about this case is that if you do not stop eating meat you will be put in prison for 50 years for charges of murder and animal violence so please stop eating animals and humans or we will charge assault on you and your familiy of murder and animal violence.
If we find you eating animals or/and humans you will be sentenced 50 years of prison.
Tomasz
Around: 150-160 words
* Good persuasion
Delete* Good argument
# Make sure you think about what you say. Like chicken nuggets are meat but I know you like them a lot.
But over all if I were the dragon, I would be persuaded. Good work!
I agree Tomasz has used logical connectives and colons to start a list.
DeleteWell done for including logical connectives and a colon to begin a list Tomasz! The items in the list don't need a capital letter and I think you will find that chicken nuggets are meat too!
ReplyDeleteHello Mr Dragon. I have heard you are addictive to meat. I have also heard that you have never tried anything else. Eating other things are better. You need to stop eating any type of meat. Here is why:
ReplyDeleteEating too much meat makes you fat. Do you really want to be fat?
Eating lots of meat makes you unhealthy. Do you really want to be unhealthy?
When you get meat, you are actually killing a person or animal. It is like someone wanting meat so they have to kill you. Would you like?
Eat other foods because:
They are tasty. Yummy.
You are being brave and trying some thing new.
It is bad to have the same foods again and again.
When you eat other foods:
Some foods make you become more healthy.
Some foods make you become more strong.
Being kind to animals and people.
Thank you. I do hope you take this into consideration. There is better food than meat. Now all animals and people will be nice to you because they know you will not eat them. Your Sincerely,
Diya Sandhu
WOW!! that was amazing!
Delete*Some really good imperative verbs
*Some brilliant points that you have made
# In the beginning, next time try to ask less rhetorical questions
Well Done Diya, that was fab!!
Diya Good work.
DeleteStar: Good vocabulary
Star:Lots of imperative verbs
Wish: -----------
Fab work DIYA.
Dear mr dragon
ReplyDeleteI am writing to you because you need to give up meat and if don't then you could be very very very unhealthy as meat is ever so high in calories and fats
and it's very salty and vegtables healthy and your pudding can be candyfloss and slush puppies.all the other dragon's have give'n up meat especially maidens they are very happy with this food you are the dragon i'm writing too and there is a good company where they stop dragons from eating meat so please stop eating meat.
Dear Purple dragon,
ReplyDeleteDo you even know what you are doing? I am trying to convince you to stop eating meat.
Animals have just as much right to live as you do. If you carry on eating them, animals will die out and you will starve to death.
You should stop eating meat and start to eat bushes, trees and leaves. This will save other animals lives and make them happier. Since you can stop yourself from eating meat, once you do other animals will be less scared of you.
I think you should do this to make your and someone else's life happier. Your Sincerely Pavan
Amazing work
DeleteStar: You sound really like you want him to stop eating meat
Star: Very emotive language and good rhetorical
Wish: Maybe include more points
I love it.
Thank you for commenting on my work
Stop eating the meat, why not try eating the candyfloss instead. Meat is unhealthy for purple dragons and you do not want to dye young because of your health Animals have just as much right to live as you do. If you carry on eating them, animals will die out and you will starve to death. Since you can stop yourself from eating meat, once you do other animals will be less scared of you and you can have friends.Thank you. I do hope you take this into consideration. There is better food than meat. Now all animals and people will be nice to you because they know you will not eat them.
ReplyDeleteYour Sincerely Seemontini
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Star: You have given reasons to each argument in your letter e.g:
Delete"Animals have just as much right to live as you do,"
(Why?)
"Because if you carry on eating them, animals will die out and you
will starve to death,"
Wish: You could start off your letter with something like "Dear Mr. Dragon" or, "To whom it may concern," instead of just rushing into the letter. You have to address who you're talking to.
Thanks Yves
DeleteGood work
DeleteStar: Well done for explaining your points
Star: Good emotive language
Wish: I agree with Yves. Don't rush into the letter and be careful with punctuation
Well Done!
Thanks DIYA
DeleteDear Mr.Dragon,
ReplyDeletePlease stop eating meat.It will make you fat and possibly ill.You are harming innocent creatures and soon there will be no meat left,so you would starve.How would you feel if someone would start eating you?
To stop you from starving and for everyone to be happy, I deeply recommend that you try eating vegetables and fruits, because you would be fit and healthy,and some fruits help your immune system,so you would live for a lot longer.
If you want to have lots of friends then you really should stop eating meat,otherwise you will be lonely for the rest of your life,because every animal in the world would fear you.
If you don't listen to me, then people would try to kill you, and I don't think you would enjoy that.
I really hope you consider all of this, and that you stop eating meat for everybody's sake.
Yours hopefully,
Kamile
Star:I like the way you thought ahead, saying what would happen if the dragon DID give up meat.
DeleteStar:You said how other animals would be affected.
Wish:Maybe you could give an example of how the fruits and vegetables effect YOU!!
To the Dragon i DEMAND YOU TO STOP EATING MEAT! Please I believe in you i have heard of vegetables and fruits and some are really tasty. Like strawberry's or pepper so please you no that people are not as tasty as these fruits. So it is unhealthy to eat people you never no how bad it is for dragons! So many of us could die so with would die out think of how the animals fill look at you how big and run screaming you pick them up. I think you wont be such a mean young dragon if you stop eating meet!
ReplyDeleteDear Mr. Dragon,
ReplyDeleteI have been concerned about the decreasing population of humans and animals, as you are eating nature's most precious things, so I'm here to convince you to STOP eating meat once and for all.
It's a very bad habit to keep on eating humans, so here are some foods I would recommend you eating the following:
Fruits and vegetables, since they are healthy and contain antioxidants, minerals and vitamins, which are extremely vital for a balanced diet e.g: tomatoes, sweetcorn, lettuce, cucumber etc. Always try something new once in a while.
Carbohydrates for everyday strength and energy, containing some B vitamins.
Dairy products: Have calcium to make your bones strong, so you can show off your muscles and bones.
Fresh fish: This is what I would recommend instead of other animal and human meats. Get it from the daily fishmonger at the local store.
My second point is that you're putting your life in danger. Just by eating a piece of dog meat, you could catch a disease called 'Trichinosis'. If you eat a human infected with Malaria, you could die in a matter of weeks, days or even hours.
Here's the deal, if you try your 5 a day, we'll fry up some meat every day for dessert! If not, you will have to stay in an unbreakable dragon jail for 64 years to survive in, as a result to your horrifying behavious Imagine if some giant monster tore your body apart, just like you did to those helpless humans you had killed for no reason. If you escape, there will be the most dangerous consequence you have ever faced in your life: calling the military.
As a result, you should probably take a few minutes to realise what you've done for the past 2 years, and take my letter into consideration.
Yours sincerely, Yves
WOW!!An amazing and long letter to the dragon, Yves.
Delete*Brilliant imperative verbs
*EPIC points!!
#Fish is meat!
WOW the amount of work that is in here is mind-blowing!!!
Star: Lots of adjectives
DeleteWish:More bossy words
ReplyDeleteDear Mr Dragon
I am writing as I have heard that you’ve been eating lots of meat. I’m going to try to persuade you to stop eating all this meat.
Too much meat is bad for your body as you can get ill or very possibly die. It gives you diseases which make you very ill and as far as I know there aren’t any Doctors around for gigantic dragons. You should be very careful about this.
A lot of meat can also make you very fat/over weighted and you don’t want people to go around saying
“Hey, look it’s that really fat and overweighed dragon. No one in the world has eaten as much meat as he has!”
I, but probably not you as you would never think or touch these things, have heard of wonderful things called vegetables. There are potatoes, carrots, cabbage, tomatoes and much more.
They all have vitamins, minerals etc.
Potatoes have carbohydrates which gives you energy.
Carrots are good for your eyesight.
Cabbage is good because you can lose weight.
Tomatoes give you Lycopene which is a vital anti-oxidant which fights cancerous cell formation.
As I mentioned before there are many more. You can eat as many and you don’t get fat. People will be saying
“Hey look it’s that really healthy dragon!”
Yours sincerely Sachin
Star: I am amazed by your Long paragraph and your sentences that you made- wow!
DeleteWish:Maybe some verbs could fit in.
star: I am impressed that you have given lots of interesting facts about the vegetables.
Deletestar: You have persuaded the dragon by saying that he might die.
wish: more punctuation please!
Dear Mr Dragon,
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I want to make one thing clear: I DEMAND THAT YOU STOP EATING MEAT! Eat vegetables because they are all very good for you!
Oranges are very healthy for you. They have lots of vitamin C. Carrots are very good for your eyesight. Bananas keep you fit. Grapes are really small so you will be able to fit lots of them into your mouth at once. Cucumber keeps you hydratrated because it is 90% water.
Milk is good for you because it has lots of calcium in it. I suggest you take my advice and eat healthly things instead of meat.
Best Wishes, Elsa
P.S. You can start tomorrow if you want!!!
One sunny day, I saw a very fat dragon eating loads of me .I walked up to him and said " Stop eating meat it isn't really healthy and you will have a tummy ache ." The dragon ignored what I said." Will give you some fish to try? The dragon dropped the meat and went to try some fish . Then he started to eat more ." Now look at you how fat you are, I think you need to have some exercise." Every hour the dragon would earned some fish . Finally the the dragon was less fat and was really fit and healthy.
ReplyDeleteDear Mr Dragon
ReplyDeleteI am writing as I have heard that you’ve been eating lots of meat. its very bad you could get very fat and un healthy. How about eating candy floss and shlush puppiesfor dessert and for dinner you can have jacket potatoes .you will be healthy and happy. hope you change your mind
Yours sincerely jaina
I think that candyfloss and slush puppies are still not very healthy for the dragon's teeth as it contains a lot of sugar and he can get diabetes. Its better to have apple crumble or fresh fruit.
DeleteDear Sir Dragon,
ReplyDeleteI'am writing to you to persuade you to eat less meat.Ihope you will change your ways after you read this letter.
First of all it will help you to be more healthy and fit it will also let you be protected from illnesses from having to much fat.It may also let you have more fun and do more sports.It makes you have more energy,nutrients and minerals.So please it less meat and stop hurting animals and humas so you can get meat.
Your sincerely Sir Dawid Krygier
Dear dragon,
ReplyDeleteI have heard you have been eating lots of meat so I have been writing to STOP EATNG MEAT I know you might be shocked but it is for the best
It will make you fat and you will breath a huge amount of fire and buildings will get burned down you are a friend of mine and you should know
Why don't you eat carrots and pomegranate juice it will make you healthy and more stronger to deflect you opponent it also makes you beat the speed dragon in races!
Thank you dragon and I hope you respond to my comment
Thanks once again- Nick (116 words)
Dear Dragon,
ReplyDeleteI am writing this letter to convince you not to eat meat/maidens or children. I am calling on your good nature to try not to eat meat. I know meat is a good source or protein but if you really have to, why don't you try rats/mice and creepy crawlies? which are also full of protein. Alternatively you could try some vegetables/fruits/nuts/and dairy products like cheese Yummy.... Milk shakes are also great as they are very filling and you can get the best flavour Chocolate...Potatoes are also very good as you can heat and bake them and fill them with yummy things , also you can cut them up into strips and make some lovely chips...with ketchup and chilli sauce. not only will this make you feel better but it will also give you nice breath and improve your health.
Dear dragon,
ReplyDeleteI heard that you have been eating meat a lot. As you know me seeing you eating humans makes me and others sick. Eating the same thing is bad and meat makes you unhealthy and fat. Do you want to be fat?
Being unhealthy gives you illnesses and makes you look ugly with rash and it would itch and you could die you never know!!!!
Haven't you ever heard of fruits and vegetables. Instead of just eating humans why don't you eat fish or something. By the way eating fruits and vegetable makes you stronger and you would be able to face dangerous stuff and maybe one day you might be bullet-proof.
Sincerely Atchu
P.S. try to be kind!!!!!!